literature

this is not a suicide note

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what would change if i left?
would you wear your sadness
like a bullet-- raw and fresh and
slung, chafing, into solemn chambers;

or would you swallow it down
to poison your lungs,
steal your breath & dissolve
the remnants of me?

would you smoke yourself out,
a pyre of anger in one fist
smouldering with resentment--
unfueled but hot and bright and
burning our love to ashes;

or would you hang it,
trailing, coiled around your neck
where it will catch, untenanted,
on shards of me and tighten
to choke you?

would you throw in the towel
and jump, too, unfettered
without my soul;

or would you just breathe butterflies,
an exultation of relief and gratitude?
As dark as this is, it's not a suicide note. I'm not suicidal.

Sometimes I just think about leaving (but I'm not going anywhere).


If you want to leave constructive feedback you're welcome to do so, but official critique is off because I can't guarantee I will actually come back to this one for any major changes. (I will of course still take any thoughts/suggestions into consideration, and appreciate them, I just don't want to feel like I've wasted your time.)
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Rohdrez11520's avatar
Damn it.

You suicide note looks just like mine, only thought out and well-worded.
Seriously, how does this keep happening?